Before/After: Letter of recommendation

This letter of recommendation was written by a supervisor for an employee, Ms. McRae. Usage mistakes are shown in red. I wonder how Ms. McRae would explain to a potential employer her strange relationship with the cheerleader team?

Before

Ms. McRae has a high degree of skills and techniques typified by only a few persons in the field of Recreation. She has successfully substantiated her ability to plan, organize and conduct recreational programs for citizens of all ages in the community. She has procreated the Cheerleader team.

Ms. McRae is a dedicated person who goes beyond the call of duty to aid her fellow workers. She has worked many hours before and after her scheduled tour of duty to help the children, teens, and adults of the community to carry out useful programs for them to engage in on Saturdays, Sundays, or holidays. Ms. McRae has been devoted to this type of service ever since.

Any programs Ms. McRae has embarked on, she has endeavored for perfection. She is a repute employee and strives to produce a program or activity to achieve to it’s highest degree of success.

After

Ms. McRae has many skills in the field of recreation. She plans, organizes, and conducts recreational programs for the community. She formed the cheerleader team.

Ms. McRae is a dedicated worker and often works overtime. She actively encourages citizens of all ages to participate in our recreational programs.

Ms. McRae continually strives to improve and perfect her recreational programs.